fourteen: (bite → will you feel anything at all?)
[XIV] Xion ([personal profile] fourteen) wrote2009-10-07 04:41 am
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A little more official this time.

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[identity profile] 300yrswandering.livejournal.com 2010-12-30 05:51 am (UTC)(link)
This is really minor and probably not important in the long run, but I think you have to be careful when you write stutters. Just going "T-this" is enough as opposed to "T-t-t-this" when writing it down, as I am assuming you were also the one who wrote the stuttering girl from the Halloween plot, and at both times (including Xion's current post) it comes off as overdone and very unrealistic, as if the person is doing it on purpose rather than because they really are stuttering. It's really minor though, but it's just something I noticed.
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